The Power of the Exiled – Revisions

Just some minor edits on my Novel, but it affects the plot going forward.

In the beginning of Chapter 4, Andrew went to the library to read the column from Miles and his gang, and they called themselves the “Freedom Fighters”… well how cliche can I get! I couldn’t think of a better name for them when I wrote it, but then two nights ago I thought it would be better to name them the Voices of the Right… I had a writer friend come over and I read her parts of the novel. She recommended revising their column because it was too mixed formal/informal… I kept most of it but added to it. Tell me what you think.

” ‘The Liberty Government – You are not as free as you appear to be’  by MB LT RF RC JM

When in the Course of human events, it becomes necessary for one people to dissolve the political bands which have connected them with another…

Those words begin the Declaration of Independence, a document the American Colonists wrote to the British crown nearly three hundred and fifty years ago. No one remembers those words anymore because they’re not taught in schools anymore.  The colonists believed that they British crown was interfering with their daily lives even though he was across an ocean and they had no representation over there. By signing their Declaration, they were in effect committing treason. But they were standing up for what they believed in.  History is filled with similar stories a minority view breaking free of the majority.

Consider this our Declaration. We call ourselves the Voices of the Right and we have been kept silent long enough by the Liberty Government. They control all media and information. Anyone who wishes to publish an opposing view is brought in for questioning at best and captured and exiled at worst. We have long worked to chip away at the Government’s control. We cannot sit idly by while a people lets their Government tell them what to think. As long as the Government has complete control over the net, the newspapers, the television stations, then they can tell their people whatever they want – and the people believe them.

Think about it. If tomorrow the Government sent out a news bulletin denouncing this column and us as its writers, would you believe them automatically? Or would you think for yourself for once, compare what we are telling you versus what the Government is telling you and realize it doesn’t add up? (It never does)

The Government does a lot of things for us that deemed for the good of us. But what they are really doing is taking the choices out of our hands and making them for us. If a woman gets pregnant and it is determined that their baby has Down Syndrome while still in the womb, then the Government forces that woman to get an abortion. It doesn’t matter that the child would be a gift, it is too much of a risk to take. The same goes for teenagers who get pregnant. The Government deems them all unfit mothers and forces them to get abortions. What about 18/19 year olds who are out of school and already have a job? Age alone should not determine whether one is a capable parent.

What about Gay Marriage? We know that there are those out there who are uncomfortable with the idea of people getting married to the same sex in the same institution that the Almighty gave us. And yet the Government forced that law on us many years ago, in the name of equal rights. The did not even consider a separate institution so as to not to defile the sacrament. If they were to put it to vote, then they would be surprised with how many people agree with us.

All we ask is to be able to have our Voices heard. But when the Liberty Government seeks to control all information, it is impossible. We want you start thinking for yourself. Maybe then you’ll realize how much you have given over to the Government. For the longest time we have worked mainly underground, but today we have raised our Voices above the dull roar of the Government because we believe we will be caught soon, despite always trying to stay one step ahead of the Government. In fact, by the time you read this, we may very well be Exiled. But our Right Voices will ring on long after others have faded.”

Andrew sat there after finishing the column for a long time. He didn’t quite know where the Voices of the Right got their ideas, but he was intrigued by their belief in freedom of information. He tried to imagine himself with an infant. Would he had been able to get a job and provide for Eileen and their child like he kept saying he could? Probably not. But he did agree with them about not only using age to determine capabilities of parenthood.

But he didn’t agree about denying same sex couples marriage just based on some religious point of view. The way he understood it was that the Liberty Government and the Church of the Almighty had been working together long before Andrew was even born. So why deny someone a right solely based on religion? It didn’t make sense to Andrew.

Before school let out today, Andrew knew he needed to do some research to attempt to sift through the lies and the truths that the column and the conversation with his dad had brought up. It looked like Andrew was going to skip a lot more than just one class today.


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